Reviewing Spree #2

I'm not really sure what inspired this, but I'm in the mood to do some more reviewing today. My focus this time is Mokuba/____ stories; meaning stories with Mokuba in the pairing. I would like to specify that none of these stories will be Mokuba/Seto, because I'm not really into the incest thing. I allow it for the Host Club fandom, but only because of the fact that it's a running gag in the show.

So far...I haven't found anything good. It's very frustrating to read and read and read, and not find anything of substance. So far I've found run-on sentences, block paragraphing (block paragraphing?! Are you serious? *pulls at hair*), and badly done lemons. I'm searching specifically for M-rated stories at the moment, as Lemons are my expertise and I can actually offer help on them.

...I have to tell you...perhaps it's because I'm on fanfiction.net, but...It's looking like a wasteland out here... I'll edit this later with more commentary.

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EDIT:

So...yeah, yesterday was ridiculous. There are no amount of words to express what I went through yesterday. It just didn't make any sense. In any case, what ended up happening in short was that I found a fic that really needed improving, I tried to explain it in the review and I didn't really feel like she knew where I was coming from so...I... *cough*

...I re-wrote her fic.

Now, this isn't something that I do all the time, and I know that this makes me a complete douche and a scumbag, but I didn't do it just to be a jerk; I actually wanted her to see the potential that her fic had. Her FF.net username is in both the summary, and in the author's notes before and after the story as a disclaimer letting everyone know that it's her story AND it's only intended for learning purposes.

In the review, I told her that I would be willing to take the fic down any time she wanted, and I stand by that.

...I've never done that to someone before. I've never re-written another person's fic, even when I was asked to. I'm not really sure what came over me, but I would prefer if I never had to go through that again...really. It took three hours of work to do that, and I wasn't even really a fan of what the fic entailed....